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Reviewer: IJReid (talk · contribs) 20:02, 14 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get on this Jens Lallensack. Overall the article looks good but I have a few comments and there are a few grammatical errors. IJReid ^discuss 20:02, 14 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

• "Strikingly" should be removed, seems slightly unencyclopedic (sorry I forgot the word I would use to describe it).
• What is "mid-height"? within so many meters of the ground? or about even with the back?
• As with the above, change "which suggest a habitual position of the snout some 80 cm above the ground" to "which suggests a habitual position of a lowered neck" or some such.
• I'd move the "for sauropod standards" outside brackets and to the end of the sentence.
• Just a suggestion, but instead of having references mid-sentence I prefer to order them all at the end of the sentence. I you think otherwise just mention it.
• "It followed the typical sauropod bauplan, with a long tail and neck, a small head, and a barrel-shaped trunk supported by four column-like legs. The neck of Amargasaurus was proportionally short for sauropod standards, as in other members of the Dicreosauridae." is self-contradictory
• "It measured" should be changed to "The neck measures".
• Link anatomical terms like convex, sacral vertebrae, adjacent, and dorsal vertebrae
• "It likely showed a horselike" I'd change to "Based on close relatives it likely showed..."
• Do you approve of these edits?

That's it for now. IJReid ^discuss 20:02, 14 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi IJReid, thanks for the comments, you made some very good points, and I think I should have fixed everything by now. Do you have any further comments? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 20:10, 15 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'd say that the rest looks quite good, but you might want to explain "penultimate" (second last). IJReid ^discuss 02:21, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hm I'm not sure. "Penultimate" and "adjacent" are not really anatomical terms, I once learned them in my English classes in School as being part of the standard vocabulary. I don't really want to "translate" them into simpler terms, since Wikipedia wants to provide a high language standard, and since the "simple Wikipedia" written in simple English already exists. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 15:41, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Honestly, when I first heard the term "penultimate", I had to look it up to know what it meant. I agree with you that adjacent is fine, but how about you link to wiktionary:penultimate. Before I pass the article, I will give it a look for improvements before FAC. IJReid ^discuss 16:46, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, you know better than me of course, its linked to Wiktionary now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 17:28, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Ah I see: "penultimate" is much more common in Britain than in America (although it exists there as well). What I learned was British Englisch. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 18:14, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Yah, that makes sense. IJReid ^discuss 19:55, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Final look:

• I would use template:convert for all measurements, as it shows the conversion from metric to imperial for americans. IJReid ^discuss 19:55, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

After this final suggestion is completed, this article can pass. IJReid ^discuss 20:38, 16 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

 Done Dunkleosteus77 ^{(push to talk)} 03:38, 17 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]