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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 05:50, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

• The lead is the section that needs the most improvement. In general, it should be expanded (to at least double the length).
• A good lead should show the progression of a player's career (i.e. the highlights of his season-to-season accomplishments), while integrating his career achievements (e.g. being in the 3000 hit club, number of batting titles). Babe Ruth is a good example of a lead that does both.
• Some things I would recommend adding are

1. He played most of his career with the Pirates
2. He played in and lost the 1927 World Series
3. All-star appearances
4. 10th all-time in triples
5. That his number was retired, and when
6. He had a brother, plus the "most hits" accomplishments or "second brother pair in HOF (if it's still a small number in total today)", or both
7. At the end (if it was really that well known): his reputation for only being able to hit with whiskey

• It's up to you what you want to add, and how you want to organize it.
• After the first mention of Major League Baseball, write "(MLB)" next to it

I believe I've expanded it enough. Mentioned: Triples, Doubles, team records, 3 batting titles, 8 seasons with 200+ hits, him and younger brother lloyd in hall of fame, and postseason appearance loss to Yankees. Hamma085 (talk) 17:38, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

• His brother Lloyd Waner ===>>> His younger brother Lloyd Waner - Done
• He was born with the middle name of John but his middle name was changed from John to Glee after an uncle of the same name gave him a shotgun at the age of 6. Waner stated ===>>> Waner was born with the middle name of John but his middle name was changed from John to Glee after an uncle named Glee gave him a shotgun at the age of 6. He stated (unclear otherwise, in the first sentence) - Done
• with the larger apparent size of the baseball he was able to hit the center more often. <<<=== Make this a separate sentence. - Done
• What classes were the Southwest League and PCL at the time? - Added Rookie and Class AA respectively Hamma085 (talk) 16:27, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

• In general, point out how the Pirates did in key years. I would point out years where they finished second, along with how many games back from first, and who won the division that year. I would also point out the few years where they had a losing record and that they only finished with a losing record three times with Waner on the team. - Added information for some losing seasons and referenced the three losing seasons in 15 years as well as finishing in the top 3 seven times while he was on the team.
• 1927 was a standout year ===>>> The 1927 season was a standout year (don't start a sentence with a number) - Done
• RBI (131) ===>>> RBIs (131) - Done
• In his only postseason appearance ===>>> In the only postseason appearance of his career (more specific) - Done
• The consecutive XBH sentence should be before the postseason sentence - Done Hamma085 (talk) 16:42, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
• , he collected at least 200 hits ===>>> He also collected at least 200 hits (separate sentence) - Done
• a .368 batting average with 117 runs ===>>> a .368 batting average and 117 runs - Done
• In 1933, Major League Baseball hosted the inaugural MLB All-Star Game ===>>> The 1933 season was also the first year that Major League Baseball hosted the inaugural MLB All-Star Game - Done
• he hit .362 and led the league in hits (217) ===>>> hitting .362 and leading the league in hits (217) - Done
• 1937 was the eighth time ===>>> The 1937 season was the eighth time - Done

• with a .258 average, 39 RBIs, 86 hits ===>>> recording a .258 average, 39 RBIs, and 86 hits - Done
• playing 92 total games (83 with the Dodgers and nine with the Yankees after being released by the former on September 1). He batted .280, 17 RBIs, and 40 hits. ===>>> He played 92 total games, 83 with the Dodgers and nine with the Yankees after being released by the former on September 1, batting .280 with 17 RBIs and 40 hits. - Done
• making one plate appearance as a pinch hitter and getting walked in his one appearance ===>>> making one plate appearance as a pinch hitter in which he drew a walk. - Done Hamma085 (talk) 16:38, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

• You never state the nicknames of Big Poison and Little Poison - Done Hamma085 (talk) 16:19, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
• Some things seem un-cited:
  • The most hits as brothers - Done Hamma085 (talk) 16:19, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Second pair of brothers in HOF - Done Hamma085 (talk) 16:19, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • His death - Done Hamma085 (talk) 16:19, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • The retirement of his number and plaque - Done Hamma085 (talk) 16:19, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

• PAUL WANER BECOMES SEVENTH MEMBER OF THE 3,000-HIT CLUB" <<<=== Make this not ALL CAPS - Done
• Do you have the McMane, Fred page number(s)? - Added, it was page 126-128
• No dab links.
• All of the links work.
• No plagiarism concerns.

The prose is pretty good. In the main part of the article, the main thing I suggested is to add the Pirates' performance when relevant. The lead needs the most work. It should be longer, and repeat the highlights from the main part of the article. I think this is your first good article nomination, so let me know if you have any questions. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 07:31, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Sportsfan77777, I believe I have made all the necessary changes, mainly adding information to the lead. Please let me know if it seems a bit all over the place. Hamma085 (talk) 17:42, 30 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I think the lead is much better now, good job! I made some tweaks throughout, and will pass the article. Good work! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 19:44, 1 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for your suggested improvements and your help! Hamma085 (talk) 20:06, 1 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]